The Key to Medical Advancement
Throughout the twentieth century,
virtually every aspect of modern medicine has reaped the rewards of
technological advancements. Society will be forever indebted to those pioneers
who conceived the vast array of preventions, treatments, and cures that are
readily available to mankind today. Apparently, the imaginations of these
pioneers know no boundaries, for every day we are informed of progress in yet
another domain of study.
Until recently, relatively little
ethical consideration needed to accompany our quest for improvement. Indeed, few
can find moral fault with important discoveries such as a polio vaccine and
insulin. However, medicine is now venturing into areas, such as genetics, which
explore the very core of human existence. Consequently, I believe that if
medical advancements in these fields are going to continue to benefit society,
we need to consider all possible ethical effects before implementing new
discoveries. We must ensure that the potential for abuse will not override the
capacity for gain.
One of the biggest breakthroughs in
genetics has been the use of bacteria to genetically engineer drugs such as
insulin and growth hormone. Five years ago, a brain tumor destroyed my
brother’s pituitary gland. He now takes genetically engineered growth hormone
on a daily basis to replace that which he no longer naturally produces. This
technology has helped give back to him a portion of what he lost to the tumor.
An effort is currently underway to make growth hormone more readily available to
the general public for treatment of ailments such as osteoporosis, severe burns,
and infertility. Many people could benefit from growth hormone, but there is
also a high probability that it will be abused for athletic purposes. Football
great Lyle Alzado appeared on national television appealing to the public to
refrain from misusing the growth hormone which he felt was responsible for his
brain cancer. Therefore I feel we need to limit how available we make the drug
in order to ensure that it does more good than harm.
Research in genetics is also
helping us to locate genes which are linked to diseases such as Cystic Fibrosis,
Sickle Cell Anemia, and Huntington’s disease. The knowledge of these genes may
lead to better treatments and maybe even a cure one day. As well, genetics is
now being used in amniocentesis tests to determine, for abortion purposes, if an
embryo has an abnormality such as the medical condition known as Down’s
Syndrome.
Giving people the opportunity to
abort an unplanned child is an issue all by itself. Giving people the
opportunity to abort a planned pregnancy because the child isn’t what they
wanted is absolutely ludicrous. I am a support worker for a child who has
Down’s Syndrome. He’s every bit as much a human being as you and I, and
therefore is entitled to all the privileges that accompany the status. Every day
he makes me smile and reminds me of how lucky I am simply to be alive. He is the
epitome of the innocence which is all too often absent from our fast-paced
lives.
What happens when our knowledge
expands, as it inevitably will, and an amniocentesis can test for hair and eye
color? Will we abort a pregnancy because the child won’t develop blond hair
and blue eyes? After all, the argument could be made that a poor physical
appearance may cause hardship in life. More importantly, if the technology
becomes available, will we custom design children to our specifications by
manipulating their genes? Whatever happened to playing the cards we’re dealt?
If we’re not careful we might create another Frankenstein.
Implementing these, and other
technologies raises some critical ethical issues. A world war took place over 50
years ago because numerous countries intensely disagreed with Adolf Hitler on
some of these same issues. Hitler wanted to create a supreme race and eliminate
disabled people such as those having Down’s Syndrome. Do we agree with basic
principles behind Hitler’s intentions and merely disagree with the method he
employed? Hitler was one of the most despised men of modern history. Don’t
look now, but it appears as though we’re simply taking a different, more
accepted route to the same destination.
Technology seems to be growing at
an exponential rate. Every door we open leads to more doors which conceal
secrets. The majority of the population can only imagine the excitement of
opening one of these doors for the first time ever. The pursuit of this
excitement has understandably overwhelmed us. We’ve been blindly unlocking
doors as fast as possible with little concern for what might lie beyond the
door. However, if mankind is going to continue to prosper we need to start
peering through the keyhole to see what lies beyond the door. Then, and only
then, can we catch a glimpse of the pros and cons of opening it.
Until now, the main difficulty in
unlocking a door has been finding the right key. Perhaps the true challenge
actually lies in deciding which doors should be opened and which doors are
better left untouched. The principle consideration in making this decision needs
to be the ethics of its potential applications.
COMMENTS:
This applicant took a risky
approach by tackling a tough subject-one that would be hard for most college
graduates (let alone a high school senior) to write about succinctly. However,
the writer made a good effort. As one officer commented, “The author obviously
thinks deeply about these important issues, and an admission officer would
recognize that this student would probably think deeply about other issues
raised in classes.” Tackling these big issues brings two inherent risks.
First, the subject matter begs a serious approach, and the writer risks coming
across as stiff and impersonal. Second, the writer risks getting in over his or
her head and can end up making general claims without the experience or ability
to back them up.
This student holds incredibly
passionate beliefs about the ethics of medical research. But ethics is a
slippery topic, far too subjective for the amount of generalizations he has
made. The “we need tos” and “we musts” make his assertions a little
too final.
The language is a bit stiff and
awkward, and the essay tends to ramble.
“Five years ago, a brain
tumor destroyed my brother’s pituitary gland.” This would be a great
opening sentence! So why is it buried? Personal experience is always a
useful tool for introducing one’s own beliefs, much more so than
unsupported blanket statements. Had the student begun here, he would have
written a stronger essay without having to compromise his position one bit.
In paragraph seven: Be careful!
The Holocaust is a loaded example. There was a lot more to it than just
eradicating disabilities. Make sure you understand the implications of the
parallels you draw.
It is dangerous for a
nonprofessional (especially a high school student) to attempt writing as
though the essay will be presented at a professional conference. You may be
writing to someone who knows much more than you and will be irritated by
your hackneyed proclamations. I give my students this advice: “Write
small.” Keep the topic close to your own life and write only about
something you know.
I admire the student for
voicing his beliefs, but I’d admire him even more if he had played
devil’s advocate a bit. One of my former professors always admonished,
“Seek the truth in what you oppose and the error in what you espouse.”
What are the weaknesses in his arguments? Is a technical advancement without
extensive debate on the potential ethical pitfalls ever appropriate?
Addressing such questions would go a long way in communicating to the
admissions committee that the author is an open minded (if steadfast)
person.
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